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TASK 2 · OUTWEIGH

More employees are now able to work from home. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Сначала сформулируй ответ на вопрос в одной фразе. Затем прочитай версию A и найди два места, где мысль заявлена, но не объяснена.

Working from home is popular nowadays and many companies allow their workers to do it. Some people think this is good and some people think it has problems. I think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages because working at home has many advantages for people. This essay will explain the main advantages and disadvantages.

Firstly, people can save time because they do not travel to the office. This is a big advantage for everyone. They can wake up later and they are not tired in the morning. Secondly, they can save money on transport and food. Thirdly, they can wear comfortable clothes and sit in a comfortable chair. These are three advantages and they make people happy. For example, my uncle work from home and he like it very much. He told me that it is good because he can be at home all day. He also has more time for his family and he can do many things during the day.

On the other hand, there are disadvantages too. People can feel lonely because they do not meet their colleagues. It is bad for communication and sometimes they cannot ask questions quickly. Also, some houses are noisy, which make working difficult. A worker may have children who needs attention. However, there are only a few disadvantages compared with the many advantages. People can use the internet to talk to colleagues, so communication is not a problem anymore. They should just try harder to concentrate because concentration is very important in every job.

In conclusion, I believe that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. There are many good things such as time, money and comfortable clothes, while there are only some bad things. Therefore, working from home is a better way to work and all people should do it.

Это авторская имитация ученической работы, а не реальная работа кандидата. Ниже — примерная оценка этого текста по критериям; другой квалифицированный проверяющий может оценить пограничные признаки иначе.

Не начинай с «красивых слов»

Сначала исправь ответ на вопрос и развитие аргумента. После этого — повторяющиеся языковые ошибки. Простая замена good на beneficial не устраняет пропущенную причинную связь.

Четыре числа здесь иллюстрируют профиль отдельного Task 2. Они не являются общим Writing band: результат Writing также зависит от Task 1. [S1, S2]

Авторский образец, написанный с ориентиром на критерии Band 9. Это не подтверждённый экзаменатором балл и не текст для заучивания. Сравнивай решения автора, а не длину слов. [S1]

The ability to work from home can reduce the daily cost of employment, but it also creates challenges for collaboration and boundaries between work and personal life. For roles that can be performed remotely, I believe the advantages generally outweigh the disadvantages, provided that employers deliberately address these challenges.

Avoiding a regular commute offers more than a small convenience. Time previously spent travelling can be used for rest, caring responsibilities or a less hurried start to the working day. The benefit is especially substantial for an employee who lives far from the office and does not need specialist equipment to complete a task. Remote arrangements can also widen the range of suitable jobs available without requiring a household to relocate. These gains recur throughout the working week, so their importance is not comparable to a minor preference such as being able to wear informal clothes.

The disadvantages are nevertheless real. New employees may find it harder to learn from informal conversations, and a message thread does not always replace the rapid exchange needed to resolve an unfamiliar problem. At home, an employee may also keep responding to messages because there is no clear moment of departure from the workplace. Neither problem disappears simply because video calls are available. Scheduled mentoring, clear response expectations and agreed periods of uninterrupted work can, however, reduce these costs without restoring a daily commute.

The balance therefore depends on the work and the support provided, rather than on the number of items in a list of benefits. In a suitable role, the recurring gains in time and access are substantial, while many collaboration costs can be limited through deliberate working arrangements. I would therefore retain home working as an option, alongside opportunities to meet when a task genuinely benefits from face-to-face contact, rather than require every employee to work in the same place every day.

Ни один фрагмент сам по себе не «даёт девятку». Ниже показано, как конкретные решения в полном авторском тексте работают на высокий стандарт. Это аналитический разбор ASHYQ, не официальный экзаменаторский отчёт.

Почему не достаточно просто убрать ошибки

Без точного ответа на вопрос и развитой поддержки даже грамматически аккуратная версия может оставаться ограниченной. Сравни структуру аргумента в двух работах, а не только исправленные окончания.

На реальном экзамене оценивается самостоятельно написанная работа целиком. Воспроизведение готовых фраз не доказывает такую же точность на новом вопросе.

Точечная редактура слабой версии

Было: There are only a few disadvantages compared with the many advantages.

Стало: The recurring time savings can be more significant than collaboration problems that the employer is able to reduce. Почему: Сравнивается значимость и управляемость, не число пунктов.

Было: People can use the internet to talk to colleagues, so communication is not a problem anymore.

Стало: Video calls can support communication, but new staff may still need scheduled mentoring. Почему: Решение ограничено; указан конкретный незакрытый риск.